Re: second attempt at first draft of Solstice Message

[Robert <http://dummy.us.eu.org/robert>]

OK, the changes are below.

Double-check 'em again.

Thanks!

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       ended up being the best man which, it turned out, was a very minor
       role is rather brief ceremony -- which was fine by me.  We were
       there only for a little over one week, but we managed to visit a
-      lot of people and do a lot of stuff.  (Leaf peeking was difficult
+      lot of people and do a lot of stuff.  (Leaf peeping was difficult
       since it was a little early for the fall colors.)  A number of photos
       were taken and are posted at
       http://www.flickr.com/photos/noelle/sets/72157627616690711/ .
...
       died this year.  She had been having health problems for a while and
       entered a hospice program.  So, it was no great surprise.  It's
       always sad when any living thing ends its life, but I think many in
-      my family felt a particular closeness to this woman due to we saw
+      my family felt a particular closeness to this woman due to what we saw
       in ourselves.
   * Home
     * The rainbow of mold.  After living in our place for a year, the mold
...
       we get to say more than just "hi" when we see 'em at the weekend
       Farmers Market.
   * Pets
-    * Our kitten has grown up.  Our cat (Gary) has begun catching, killing,
-      and eating wildlife: birds.  This was troublesome alone, but he started
-      bringing the birds into the house.  First, he brought a bird into the
-      bedroom and it flew around frantically.  It ended up hurting itself
-      by flying into the ceiling.  Thankfully, we were able to put it outside.
-      Second, he caught a bird in the middle of the night.  Noelle heard it
-      and coaxed Gary to let the bird go.  Noelle put the bird in a box and
-      brought it into the Wildlife Center the next day.
+    * Our kitten has grown up.  Our cat (Gary) has begun catching,
+      killing, and eating wildlife: rats and birds.  This was troublesome
+      alone, but he started bringing the rats and birds into the house.
+      First, he brought a bird into the bedroom and it flew around
+      frantically.  It ended up hurting itself by flying into the ceiling.
+      Thankfully, we were able to put it outside.  Second, he caught a
+      bird in the middle of the night.  Noelle heard it and coaxed Gary to
+      let the bird go.  Noelle put the bird in a box and brought it into
+      the Wildlife Center (http://www.wcsv.org ) the next day.  The bird
+      recovered at the center for 2 months and then it was released into
+      the wild.
   * Transportation
     * Bicycle
       * A spoke too soon.  I've begun to wonder if I made the right choice
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       * Treking down the prescribed path.  After getting a new pair of
         eyeglasses, I found that I couldn't see well out of 'em.  That
         discovery started a series of events (which are not yet resolved).
-        I went back to the optometrist who told me that my prescription had
-        changed within a period of 4 weeks.  She suggested I see an
-        opthamologist, which I did.  He put me through a battery of tests and
-        found very few problems.  FINISH LATER
+        I went back to the optometrist who told me that my prescription
+        had changed within a period of 4 weeks.  She suggested I see an
+        ophthalmologist, which I did.  He put me through a battery of
+        tests and found very few problems.  He referred me to another
+        ophthalmologist who also put me through more tests.  Nothing
+        significant was found.  She sent me to my primary doctor to see if
+        I had diebetics.  I didn't.  Eventually, the first ophthalmologist
+        admitted that there was no explanation and that that I will
+        probably have to live with having a varying prescription.  (Which,
+        I suppose, means that I may have to have a cache of eyeglasses to
+        choose from, depending upon the state of my eyes that day.)
     * Spine
       * What a pain in the neck.  In late December 2010 and early January,
         I started experiencing neck pain.  I went to a doctor, got